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stormdracona) wrote2004-07-19 07:07 pm
stormdracona) wrote2004-07-19 07:07 pm
Okay starting Now
I'm also known as StormDracona, that journal is a fanfic story in the works (stinks I know)but hey! This is my PERSONAL journal so lets hang out now shall we?
Snippet to a KR story I'm writing!
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Gunshots rang out loud and clear as Michael ducked behind a nearby pickup truck. The bullets rang against its left side ripping it apart it seemed. Michael ducked and brought his comlink to his face.
"Kitt! Where are they?!" He yelled into the comlink, hoping his partner had found him.
"I can't pinpoint them Michael! There's to much interference!" Kitt exclaimed stressed.
"Great!" Michael groaned ducking more as another round of bullets pinged into the pickups hide. Then all was silent.
"Pal? Why did the-" He was suddenly cut off as he was lifted of the ground with a wave of pure scorching heat and the roar of something exploding. The pickup truck was lifted onto two tires leaning dangersly from the force. Its mangled body bent in less then a few seconds.
Michael landed on his stomach roughly. He pulled his right knee up under him so he could push himself forward seeing he was in danger. Right then the pickup finally teetered and flipped onto his left leg that was still outstretched before he could move forward. Michael screamed as his leg was crushed, he didn't know he had screamed a name before his voice gave out and he fainted from pain.
"Michael! MICHAEL?!?" Kitt cried as he heard his partner scream his name. He ignited his engine and drove to where the comlink said his fallen partner was. He hoped he wasn't to late.
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Well like it, hate it? What you think of this scene?
Snippet to a KR story I'm writing!
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Gunshots rang out loud and clear as Michael ducked behind a nearby pickup truck. The bullets rang against its left side ripping it apart it seemed. Michael ducked and brought his comlink to his face.
"Kitt! Where are they?!" He yelled into the comlink, hoping his partner had found him.
"I can't pinpoint them Michael! There's to much interference!" Kitt exclaimed stressed.
"Great!" Michael groaned ducking more as another round of bullets pinged into the pickups hide. Then all was silent.
"Pal? Why did the-" He was suddenly cut off as he was lifted of the ground with a wave of pure scorching heat and the roar of something exploding. The pickup truck was lifted onto two tires leaning dangersly from the force. Its mangled body bent in less then a few seconds.
Michael landed on his stomach roughly. He pulled his right knee up under him so he could push himself forward seeing he was in danger. Right then the pickup finally teetered and flipped onto his left leg that was still outstretched before he could move forward. Michael screamed as his leg was crushed, he didn't know he had screamed a name before his voice gave out and he fainted from pain.
"Michael! MICHAEL?!?" Kitt cried as he heard his partner scream his name. He ignited his engine and drove to where the comlink said his fallen partner was. He hoped he wasn't to late.
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Well like it, hate it? What you think of this scene?
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I'm such a nag ;P
Seriously, you've got a good scene here. It's well described and well written. Now Finish it!
hugs
tomy
who will be keeping tabs on you now *cackles manically*
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Not bad, Storm! (Can I call you 'Storm'?) Blowing Michael up in an explosion seems to be a favorite activity of KR writers. You'll find many like-minded individuals -- ::cough:: Nutty! ::cough:: -- over at
If you decide you'd like to have a beta-reader, I'd be willing to help out. Just not this week -- I've already got one major project to work on! ;P
Aww thanks guys
Storm
(on summer break and writing a storm*cough*)